Mlela
By Kennedy Kaula
This part
of the river was my favorite. I liked the sight of fishermen and kids swimming.
I hated the women who came with laundry. They made unnecessary noise. But they
never came often, so they did not really worry me.
Mlela was
the only physical feature our village had. It is believed that over a hundred
years ago the most holy man in the village drowned in Mlela. Ever since the
incident happened, the river turned into a home for various kinds of fish than
any other river in the neighboring villages; apparently proving to be of
economic value to us. In the rainy season, Mlela does grow muscles although no
one has ever drowned in the river. There is a spirit of the holy man under that
river working tirelessly for the goodness of the village.
Unlike the
fishermen, the kids and the whole village, I found the river so generous in a
special way. It offered me the best writing ideas than any place I have ever known.
My usual spot was a T-carved stone that lay under a mango tree along the river.
No story is told of the person who carved that stone nor do the villagers have
an idea why it had to be the letter T. Most people were afraid of that stone so
ever since I discovered it, I found the seat empty when I went for my writing. Here,
I could write more than I could breathe.
This
wonderful morning I headed for Mlela to seek writing ideas. There was a short
story competition my brother called from town to tell me about. I told him I
was only a poet hence short stories were not really my thing. He insisted on
saying a writer is a writer so it was lame to give that excuse. I had to get
into that competition. I wasn’t too sure but I promised to write a story and
send it to him via the post office. He agreed he would type it and e-mail it as
soon as it got to him.
I had read
short stories before, in secondary school. I loved them then, but my interest
was in performing arts. So in this battle between a poet and a persistent
brother in town, Mlela had to intervene.
I was
surprised when I saw a person warmly seated on my stone as I neared the spot.
It was a lady. She appeared to have been enjoying the usual summer blessings
from Mlela: the cool breeze, the twittering birds and the sighing trees. And I
only thought by then everyone in the village knew that stone was my God’s given
property. I didn’t work hard for it, I agree; it wasn’t my legal property, yes; but we had
gotten used to each other. There were times when kids used to go and play on
that stone but they all fled into Mlela when they saw me coming. That woman had
to be a visitor, for even when she saw me standing next to her, not a single
part of her body made a slightest move. She raised her head to look at me.
“Hi.”
I was
right. She was a stranger. From town actually. Her eyebrows were tweezed and
were almost the shape of a hastily written horizontal S. She wore a loose long blue dress that was caught between
the dilemma of obeying the gentle pressure from the breeze and trying to stick
to her small body. Her light skin was like nothing I had seen in the village
before. Mpenja’s daughter was light, yes, but if one got closer for a healthy
look one would be disappointed to see stained skin on her face. This one knew
the magic of light skinned girls well. She was pretty, and slightly above my
age I guessed.
“Hi,” she
repeated.
“Oh sorry,
Hello. You are not from around here, right?"
“How do
you know?” she asked in the midst of giggles.
“Well,
because you have taken my seat and it seems you have no idea it is mine. Look, I
am standing here.”
She seemed
puzzled why a man would claim as his a stone that seemed so natural save for
the shape. She moved her small body further to the tail of the T-stone,
probably contented with the vigor in my words I was the one who carved it. I
understood she meant for us to share the seat; town girls! Well, save for the
two centimeters gap that separated town girl from village poet, I rested my
body on the rest of the stone and we were both facing the Mlela.
“My name
is Grace. So what do you come here for, Mr. Stone-owner?” she was pointing at
the notebook in my left hand. “Study?”
The good
thing about people who suggest answers to their own questions, my literature
teacher once told the class, is that in doing so they grant you permission to
lie to them. I debated on whether to tell town girl the truth or simply nod to
her suggestion.
“No. Not
study,” I turned my face to directly look at her.
“I come
here to write. I am a writer. And they call me Siti. Village short for Steven.”
I loved
the name Siti which did stretch to as far as Sitivini when most of the funny villagers called me.
“Oh nice.
But why here, Siti?”
I shrugged.
“Because,
here, Mlela dictates and all I do is transfer into my notebook. You barely
understand this, I know,” I smiled.
“Contrary,
I do understand really. It’s like you leave your mind at home when you come
because here, the Mlela thinks for you. It speaks to you through the whispering
trees and the giggling children in its waters. With the hooks of those
fishermen, Mlela catches your heart and you keep falling in love with it.”
“Wow! That
is amazing.”
She had
explained it better than I was ever going to put it. Was she a poet too? I
would ask her at the end of our conversation, I promised myself.
“And what
are you doing here, Grace?” she amazed me so I started to get curious.
“I came
here to pass time. There is no power again in the village this morning. I like
napping when there is no power, but I guess am now tired of it.”
I didn’t
mention, but our village was slowly catching up with development. Four months
back, the government brought electricity. Although most of the families spoke
highly of how they would buy electrical appliances as soon as electricity set
its feet in the village, very few individuals kept their word when it did.
Those who bought Television sets had a predictable fate as they all ended up
opening video shows that made quite solid profits to be honest. Films
translated into Chichewa made noise as one passed by these video shows which
were packed with men and children, and sometimes women. They were lucky. Most
of us simply enjoyed the pleasure of tube bulbs lighting our houses at night.
Two months
later, however, they had started taking back their electricity. We were left
with only one thought; that maybe it was an indirect way of telling us we
didn’t put it to its best use. Or why else would there be no lights on
consecutive mornings, sometimes afternoons and even nights?
“Hey,
can’t you write a poem about this?” town girl asked with the air of seriousness
on her face.
“Am here to write a short story actually.
There is a competition I want to participate in.”
“That’s
even better then. You know what, they like stories that tackle serious current
issues.”
She is
really a writer of some sort, I thought. A serious writer maybe. Otherwise how
could she know so much?
She was
actually making sense. I looked at Mlela. The river had chosen a unique way to
speak to me that morning. On its other side, fishermen occasionally looked at
us as they waited for their catch. And they did not have to wait so long. It
was as if Mlela was their Jesus commanding them to cast their hooks into the
deeper part of the river. They would then struggle to haul their hooks out of
the water due to the size of the stuck fish. Those hooks were the heart of so
many lives; they kept children in school and brought peace to families.
To our far
left, kids swam. They tossed their naked bodies into the river carelessly
knowing there was no harm in doing so. Town girl sat quiet. Her delicate dress
had so much cloth that some of it driven by the breeze covered my laps. All
these acts raised positivity in me. She picked that part of her dress from my
laps and tucked it under her right thigh. This was all Mlela’s language. I
would have been a fool not to understand it.
“I like
the idea, Grace. I like it so much. But how do I put it in a story?”
“I don’t
know.” She laughed before continuing, “ask Mlela.” She laughed again. “Well,
maybe you will write it the way it is. You will tell them the history of Mlela
and how it inspires your writing. You will describe your village and finally
get to the power outages issue. Just be honest about it.”
I opened
my notebook and took some notes. She seemed delighted to be part of something
big in my life. I had questions to ask her – personal questions. I wanted to
know how old she was, where she came from, and finally whether she liked me.
But it was too soon to disappoint Mlela’s emissary. She had to finish what she
came for first.
“And of course you will have to be creative
about it, you are a poet you know. Add taste to it by introducing some fictitious
turn of events.”
“You are
right,” I said as I jotted down her last point.
The sun
hit the river with the violence of the summer blaze. With all that heat I was
certain the fish were boiling under Mlela. With all that ravening heat I wondered
if the fishermen would still need to
cook the fish once they got home. Under the mango tree the two of us enjoyed
the shade. Town girl noticed a group of men to our right down the river. They
were without doubt noble men. They dressed up neatly, one only wondered what
they were doing by the river side.
“Look.
Those men. That’s not a friendly talk they are having, is it?”
“I don’t
think so.”
There were
about nine men who were, in a way, arguing; talking with pointing fingers at
each other. The fishermen noticed too and they hurried to the scene. I didn’t
really want us to go so I kept on giving town girl guesses for what might have
caused the argument. After sometime the men stopped arguing and were now walking
towards us along the bank. The man who led their way carried what looked like a
big sheet of paper. The fishermen followed.
The men
were now standing a few meters from where we sat. We learnt from the fishermen
that five of them including the one carrying the sheet of paper were from
Taniya, our neighboring village. The other four were sent by our chief as
delegates on the matter. The paper was unfolded and they all got closer around it.
We could hear them clearly.
“See here.
This is what I was saying. This is the initial map. Not the one your chief
showed us the other day. Your part of the river ends there. The rest goes into
our village.”
The man
was pointing as boundary a certain big natural tree that stood there for ages.
It had been a witness to so many of Mlela’s blessings. It was so respected that
when one day Mdoko, the village troublemaker, was caught trying to cut it down
he was summoned to the chief’s house where he rubbed off his sin with two
goats. The tree healed eventually but the scars Mdoko caused still interrupt
the smoothness of its skin.
We had
heard that Taniya wasn’t really happy with the boundary between the two
villages. The rumor that one day Taniya was going to come and claim part of
Mlela grew wider ever since after the holy man drowned and the river flourished.
We never trusted Taniya’s ways of survival. We heard it partnered with a white
man who wanted part of the river for something that wasn’t disclosed to us yet.
That’s how their chief had betrayed their giant mountain a few years ago. Bull-dozers
worked not only tirelessly but also mercilessly bringing the astounding heroic
mass of rock down. Our chief would never do that. He had a feel for nature and
believed it lamented every time it was destroyed. So he assured us that Taniya
would not steal part of Mlela.
Seeing the
seriousness on those men’s faces, I knew it wasn’t going to be a battle so
easily won. What tampered with my nerves was that the mango tree together with
that stone would belong to Taniya if they won the battle. Again, sharing the
river with Taniya would anger the old spirit under those waters. Surely the old
spirit would escape and legend would then be told in future of a village that
once brandished endless godly blessings but ended so badly.
The men
argued. Town girl watched with interest until the men, exhausted with all the
talking and finger pointing that they kept repeating phrases, left the place.
“So, I
didn’t take your seat after all.”
I forgave
her delicate sarcasm.
“Our chief
won’t let…”
“Oh hey
Mr. Stone-owner!” she called out smiling as if she just made a greatest
discovery. “Your story. You can include what just happened. Don’t you think it
would make a nice story?”
Grace’s
cellphone rang and she excused herself. I watched town girl chameleon her way
along the river bank as she talked on the phone. Her dress swung. I watched her
keenly until she disappeared behind trees where the river bent. Was Mlela
taking its emissary back?
She had given me the best short story idea ever. I
was going to write about power outages and Taniya’s threat on Mlela. Maybe this
was Mlela trying to save itself; saving the Village. Maybe if I won the
competition and people in town read the story they would help our chief.
I sat on
my stone and kept looking her direction but town girl never came back. Perhaps
I should have told her in the first place that I liked her. I tried to cheat my
mind that I was still smelling her perfume, but Mlela sent a cold breeze that wiped
the trickery away. I was determined to write the story. I looked at Mlela and
begged for a story title. I paused for a few seconds and then broke into a
laughter.
“Of course
it will be titled Mlela,” I said to
myself.
And after a few more seconds Mlela had given me the very
first two sentences of my short story:
This part of the river was my favorite. I liked the sight of
fishermen and kids swimming…
its very nice read ken.. its a style i havent come across
ReplyDeleteVery Captivating Story.....Enjoyed it
ReplyDeleteWow I love the story Ken.... Keep up the good work bro
ReplyDeleteinteresting
ReplyDeleteu have talent
keep the fire burning
mumve
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ReplyDeleteNice. Awesome write up, love the story you trying to tell.
ReplyDeletevery nice... bravo ....
ReplyDeleteAwesome...you've always been great...I hope you'll win.
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ReplyDeleteHaha dude, that was clever. Very metaphysical. Epic stuff boss, great job.
ReplyDeletekennedy you know your art and i love your work
ReplyDeleteWooow. I have respect for you my brother. It makes me wish I was the author. I salute you. Keep up with good work.
ReplyDeleteMesho your a good writer too.
DeleteNicely done Ken,i've really enjoyed it,kip t up
ReplyDeleteSo captivating man, i couldn't stop myself from finishing the whole story. your writing has that powerful control over the readers mind in a way you want them to react. nice one man...respect!!
ReplyDeleteI remember the place like Mlera at the college where we chat till midnight. enjoyed it boss
ReplyDeleteGood work Ken
ReplyDeleteyour writing is phenomenon ken, writing is your thing man! reading your story and it seemed vivid to me...more love for u..
ReplyDeletewow! where have you been all this time ken? u painted the picture for me in your story. credit for it
ReplyDeleteone day you will build poetic houses! architect poetry. Kennedy u are one Unidentified Flying Object.. nice writing
ReplyDeleteabwana mumatha zinthu izi, ulemu wanu!! iwe ndi ntondo
ReplyDeleteWow...beautiful story...big up!!
ReplyDeleteTotally love it
ReplyDeleteYah mumve production at its best, you rocks broh!
ReplyDeleteYah mumve production at its best, you rocks broh!
ReplyDeleteThis is cool. I like your style of writing. Hoping the same best work from you in the future
ReplyDeleteThis is cool. I like your style of writing. Hoping the same best work from you in the future
ReplyDeleteBravo Mr Kaula. still in my head whether Grace was a spirit or human. I love the creativity. all the best
ReplyDeleteGreat work ken..
ReplyDeleteGood one man
ReplyDeleteGood one man
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ReplyDeleteWow this is super work Kennedy. I like it that the story seems like a cycle. the two sentences that start the story end it. too much creativity.
ReplyDeleteWooooow!!! "Mlela" Lunyangwa river? Hahahahaaa i do respect ur writings Ken nice as usual.
ReplyDeleteNice big
ReplyDeleteNice big
ReplyDeleteMlela. so powerful. And imagine the coincedence, there was a black out here in blantyre as i read the story around 6pm. I nodded as the narrator spoke about power outages. nice choice of themes.
ReplyDeleteA piece that backs itself up. I wish Grace came back for Siti though. I don't know why. haha. big up Ken
ReplyDeleteNice work bro. Grt words too. I like it
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ReplyDeleteI like the originality of the story,it's an impeccable creation
ReplyDeletegreat minds ken, i enjoyed the story more than watching a movie, i could feel the atmosphere.
ReplyDeleteWhat a story, you are talented brah.
ReplyDeleteThe Idea of presenting Malawi and Tanzania as villages and Lake Malawi as a river is very super creative. And I like how you gave a clue on Tanzania by naming it Taniya. Nice story of a person writing a story..
ReplyDeleteWow! Ken you not only a poet you know.I love the plot and all. This is a really nice Story
ReplyDeleteWow this is Exhibit bruh...Nicely composed story
ReplyDeleteA story well written. I like it
ReplyDeleteBeautiful piece..love it
ReplyDeleteOh oh was it the spirit of the Holy man that came back as Grace? Haha amwene tikanakhala Ife bwenzi Grace yo atabwelanso. You left I hanging. all in all a great piece reflecting the Malawi of today. Wish you well bredda.
ReplyDeleteMlela is real art....
ReplyDeletein-born talent!! u painted a picture of your imagination. this is the real definition of creativity!
ReplyDeletehaha I called it "A blind man watching a video"
DeleteNice piece...keep it burning
ReplyDeleteNice piece...keep it burning
ReplyDeleteLove your work always .... This is art to be appreciated!!!
ReplyDelete#Salute
Love your work always .... This is art to be appreciated!!!
ReplyDelete#Salute
More than words can say, u have a unique way of delivering your story. thumbs up ken!!
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work mare... Always love your work!!!
ReplyDeleteawesome story, enjoyed the moments how they are been presented,
ReplyDelete#zobadwa nazo izi, iwe ndi poet basi
intriguing piece of art! so captivating and interesting in reading. we need writers like you ken in our English literature in our schools.. love for u
ReplyDeleteVuto lake zitha kutenga nthawi kuti mpaka ma stories olembedwa tele apite mma school. koma you are right.
Deleteulemu man mumatha!! zambiri sis akamba,
ReplyDeleteu causing literal threat in Malawi, akumanganitu
You would think the writing in Mlela is simple. But then sit down and think about it more. I sense the venom of a writer who is tired of his country. So tired that the only reason he is not out of the country is because he has nowhere else to go. Keep writing young man. you made me read with interest.
ReplyDeleteRegarding this as my first ever experience with a cycle story. But wait, does it mean that if Sitivini was to continue writing the story it would be the same story? Lol Ken. Nice shot. not only a poet.
ReplyDeleteWow Kennedy this is very nice, got talent bro. Keep it up, God bless this. I see creativity and knowledge here.
ReplyDeleteThank you a lot guys. I see all your comments. God bless you. I know some of you had to create gmail accounts just to comment here. Good job. Remember as you comment to also like the Facebook page Pen Avenue Malawi . Stay blessed.
ReplyDeleteOkay boss. you are welcome. you got something cooking in your head. bless.
DeleteProfound declaration of togetherness.
Deletehaha the ending......so wow Ken its really a nice story
ReplyDeleteAmazingly beautiful style and profound creativity ken. you have tackled critical themes. Wish you all the best
ReplyDeleteFind a way to get this story to 'Taniya'. They need to read this. They have to know that "Our Chief won't let Taniya steal part of Mlela". Dope writing. Bola magetsi asazime. lol
ReplyDeleteI don't regret doing my best to comment here. Trying to save Mlela here. Time bomb waiting to explode; Kenn
ReplyDeleteHie Kennedy. This story is beautiful. It's like a blind man watching a video. The words make vivid images. keep it up
ReplyDeleteTHIS IS AWESOME KEN... KEEP THE GOOD WORK UP... I HOPE THE TOWN GIRL COMES BACK TOMORROW AND ANSWERS ALL THE QUESTIONS U HAD!... I REALLY LIKED EVERY SINGLE PART IN THIS STORY...
ReplyDeleteTown girl isn't coming back hahahaha. Just like the others I believe Town girl is a spirit. HAHAHA!
DeleteBefore I get to the story Let me say it has been fun for me to finally get on this platform. Quite adventurous trying to comment using WordPress, TypePad etc, lol. You would laugh too but that's how most people want to comment here but are failing. When you introduced on that App group an idea for us make a gmail account I laughed at first, but then when I read the story I couldn't do otherwise but help a brother. My concern is can't there be like two ways to make this commenting issue possible in an easier way; like to say share the links on Pen Avenue Malawi facebook page so that some people can simply comment there? Saying this because there is really alot of comments there that haven't gotten here because of the procedure. To me it has been fun though.
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And hey, I've read through the comments, I think no one has used the word Masterpiece yet, lol. Mlela is a masterpiece expressed in a language that's clear and the content is very edible by everyone since we are all in this Malawian mess together. My hands clapping for you. Jah Guide
Lol am sorry for the trouble Sir. But I appreciate the love. You had to do this. Especially you. The only difference between your name and mine is the TH at the end. haha thanks a lot and God bless
Deletewhere have you been all this while, all these badly written stories in our schools can be rewritten by your creativity and u still maintaining both cultural and modern way of delivering your story. i love this story and wish it was a book. nice work man
ReplyDeleteyou shared the feeling and made most of us part of it. its like i was also there watching mlela river with both you and town girl.. though we have just started 2017 but i believe this is the best story so far! ##Salute
ReplyDeletei like the way u put myself in it... a had a feel as being part of it...looking forward to more of your work a book mayb am impressee
ReplyDeleteWow am so thrilled right now, this is a great story, a great style of writing. I love it
ReplyDeleteI read your bio. I think this is a story about yourself; a poet who wrote a short story competition.. Your bio says you started recently writing stories . this is a marvelous start..Mlela.
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ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful lets give Harry Daniel's soul a black color lol.. The story's interesting
ReplyDeleteWow, amazing.. mmmmmhh so captivating. ..I like to read more of your workđź‘Ź
ReplyDeletewow... bravo! & keep it up man
ReplyDeletei like the story big up bro. we need writers like you
ReplyDeleteToo Malawian too real. I enjoyed the story, it's funny and serious at the same time. Keep it Malawi.
ReplyDeleteHello Kennedy Kaula. Most of the things have been unveiled already. Am sorry am late kkkkk. But still more need I not to utter a word or two? This is incredibly beautiful writing. And the creativity eeeh! Continue!
ReplyDeleteOkay boss! Now there is too much things going on with you. Architecture, Poetry and Story writing. All good all art.I wish you all the best boss. Mlela is a hit. "This part of the river was my favorite. I liked the sight of fishermen and kids swimming...." The beginning and the end!!!
ReplyDeleteMalawi and its happenings. Always saddens me when I think about my country. When shall things get better? You've slapped us with a story so sharp Mista, our cheeks will always burn with the shame. Malawi.
ReplyDeleteYo...this 1 is dope
ReplyDeleteVery interesting story. The subject matter is fresh and is kept fluid. The language especially at the begining needs to improve though
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Crimzonblog91 really appreciate. And I have taken note of what you have said. God bless.
DeleteReminds me of my brother. Every time lights are off he gets out of the house and sits on the verandah speechless. He barely talks to us. Then he gets in and goes to bed. haha. A story Wisely done. When will Malawi learn?
ReplyDeleteIt can't get more creative than this. Although am sad Grace never came back whether she was a spirit or not. Or is it only me who gets frustrated with a sad ending? She should have come back lol, some spirits get married. Remember Mami Wota of Uncle Ben's Choice?
ReplyDeleteThat aside, it's a very good story boss. Keep literature burning. Jah bless
Hahaha Mami Wota the Naija spirit. Well am sorry it saddened you Max. I prolly thought it would create some mystical turn of events. Well prolly the aim was to sadden you anyway, take it that way. I appreciate the love. God bless
DeleteIt's nice, very nice.
ReplyDeleteIt is not easy to write a story that feels like a poem, a painting and still be a story. you have kept it Malawian so many people can relate to it. And dope idea; writing about writing about something.
ReplyDeleteFirst am sorry Mista it took me time to see this. Been busy lately.
ReplyDeleteA good selection of themes and setting are what makes this story pop out.
Bringing Malawi and TZ to a small scale(villages) can easily be handled with by readers.
And oh, the writing about a competition too, really crazy.
Great story.
ReplyDeletehahaha, your Mami Wota as Maxwell Kumwenda put it, I have laughed. You writes have a thing with making spirits unique.
Mami Wota was a spirit of a white lady. Grace was the only beautiful thing the narrator saw in the village, from town too.
Brilliant. Palibe chotilepheletsa kudikila novel in two years time.
ReplyDeleteYou rock aise. Nice plot. Simple english
ReplyDeleteTime to put Malawian Map on a MAP. Our Lake. Our Lake. So touching and keep it up...
ReplyDeleteMan inuyo kufuna kufanana ndi MBC? To inform, To Educate and to Entertain. HAha lovely.
ReplyDeletealways never doubted u had talent. may God bless you. fire up
ReplyDeleteGreatness is here Mumve Poet. Let's meet up one day Mumve. You the bestest.
ReplyDeletewow! All brightness it's a nice story Kenny. Mukawina tufuna ma units apa. Mumatha koma.
ReplyDelete¡QuĂ© buen trabajo y me encanta el artĂculo! Gracias................
ReplyDelete¿Qué puede hacer un abogado de tráfico?
que hace un abogado de trafico